Lord Anzius

Alan stared up from the fire as a girl ran at them. (People are coming up like mushrooms) He thought. He smiled and stood up, he walked to the girl. ...

It is, good. Short. Lovely and deep. Shows enough feeling.................................................................................................................... Great :D well done *******

Good but not perfect. The amount of Vampire stories on this site are getting high. I don't really like them myself (Sry to all the vamp lovers here), But this ...

Be welcome :D *********************************************************************************** LORD ANZIUS WUZ HERE :smt029

Hmm :? The new ending doesn't rime as well as the last one. But then again it makes the poem even more dramatic. In that sense it is a good ...

I edited it now

*Changed your picture.* MARADOMIN : "Nerand can't use his power in three days? Excellent." Maradomin smiled He was almost ready with his chanting. "Prince would you be so kind and ...

Took a step, closer to headman's hill, If he would have had the will, Surely he would have not had to kill. The man who was not even bad. But ...

Harsh.... Realistic though. Are you angry at someone???? try and remember the comas and periods. didn't rime all the time but was good anywayz. good work :D LORD ANZIUS WUZ ...

Maradomin: Maradomin sweard under his breath "Damn." he was angry. Not here not now. he thought. They were in a big round hall, there were four corridors going east, west, ...

Name: professor Abdullah Nightingale Age: a few hunderds of years Race: Edyet Book or Movie: 13½ half lives of cptain bluebear Appearance: has seven brains, four are in four small ...

Fat Carl Monday: Carl could feel his every part turning warmer only of the idea of that large amount of rum. He helped the boy up. "I'm very interested, indeed." ...

THX :D

Ok. I'll change a few things in the story. Thx for the crit guys. But I must say that the main character is a boy, and the human like figure ...

So in the very end was it a poem about friendship? Very dramatic, well done lad. :) hope to read more of your works 'cos this is the first time ...